Inquiry Term 2 Buffalo chops

 

Buffalo chops

At the break of dawn waiting anxiously, I sense a buffalo nearby, walking towards me. I try to blend in with the dry golden, rocky, African plains. The buffalo walks past, not expecting me here. I get ready to pounce on the fat, juicy Buffalo. The buffalo senses something strange. He stops and sniffs the air. This is my chance to get some fat, juicy buffalo chops. I pounce on the back of the buffalo and then. 

I sink my razor sharp claws into the buffalo's back, as he tries to get me off his back. But I keep digging my claws in deeper and deeper. I dig my pearly white teeth into the side of his neck. Drops to the dusty, rocky track he lets out a bellow for help. The buffalo kept on kicking, so I tried to pin it down making sure he doesn't run away. I start ripping up the skin of the buffalo. I get to the fat juicy buffalo chops for dinner but... 

Aleasha Atkins

Learning Goal: Is to add detail and hook in my reader so I can keep them entertained.

What I liked the most: I like to get words on the paper, I liked reading my writing and seeing it all come together. Looking at all of my editing, feed forward, and feedback from my classmates.

What I found hard/frustrating: 

What I found hard was reading my writing, editing it, making a lot of changes and trying to keep it in the same tense. Trying not to switch from the past to now.

What I Can Do Next Time/difference:

Next time I will not try to reach the deadline, and try to get all of it done in one day and  I kept on missing out the most important parts. I  was not reading my writing and my writing did not make sense all my sentence were all over the place.